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Merge pull request #11 from ddm231/master
improved examples
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@@ -143,13 +143,13 @@ We sabotage our writing though weak language, kicking the legs out from
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beneath our verbs and tearing at the foundations of our nouns, watering
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down the very points that we are trying to drive home.
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* “I _got_ up and _went_ to work.” (weak)
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* “I awoke and walked to work.” (better)
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* “I _got_ up at precisely 8 AM.” (weak)
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* “I woke up at precisely 8 AM.” (better)
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We diminish the weight of our ideas by adding modifiers and fillers.
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*The regiment _that_ took the hill was _perhaps_ a hundred strong.” (weak)
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*Despite heavy losses, the regiment took the hill.” (better)
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*That night was _perhaps_ the most important moment of my life, and I don't _think_ I'll ever forget it.” (weak)
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*That night was the most important moment of my life, and I'll never forget it.” (better)
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Words can also be weakened through overuse.
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